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Post by jessie on Oct 13, 2011 15:40:08 GMT -6
Melinda did such a amazing job with her Brokeback mountain one shot. Melinda I truly hope you do more of them, in the future. It took me so long to watch the film, it is one of my favourite movies of all time. Here is a short story, hope you like it. I like trying new things, this is different, sad and sweet all at the same time.
Chapter 1
Alma was watching Ennis from across the table, he was a good man, but lately he barely touched her, or spoke 2 words to her. She tried to grab his attention, but he would either do something with the children, or go off doing stuff that she swore he did just to get away from her. The only time he was truly happy was when he went on those months long trips up the Mountain. He never talked about his time, all he would say it was hard work, and it brought good money. She longed for his touch, she longed for his lips against her. She felt maybe it was her looks after the children were born she was looking tired, but she knew it wasn't that. She knew probably those nights he came home with beer on his breath he probably was with some other woman. She knew this town was small, but no one ever said they saw him with anyone. He looked down the table at her, and she smiled, and he smiled back, but she could see he wasn't happy. He loved being a Daddy, but she felt it in her heart he wasn't happy being married to her. She jumped up grabbing the plates, Jenny and Alma Jr yelled, "Ma Ma, I wasn't finished"
"Yes you were go to your room, and finish your homework". They jumped up running to their rooms upset. Ennis got up walking over to Alma who was by the sink.
"What is up with you Alma, they were not finished"?
"Well I was they shouldn't play with their food, I have to do the dishes. You never want them doing chores, they should do it not always getting away with it because of you. I have to deal with them the months you are away, your leaving next week, they should help around here."
"Fine I just think their homework is more important, and they need to look forward to their futures"
"What I have isn't good enough, I cook, and clean, and do everything for this family, and I get no respect"
"I respect you, what are you talking about"?
"You don't even look at me Ennis how do you think that makes me feel? I'm sick because of my own daughters, you at least talk to them. You take them for walks, you never think to ask me"
"Why didn't you say you wanted to come"?
"Because you could have asked"
"Alma I don't understand why your doing this now? I work to give you, and my Daughters this home, and the food on the table. I have to leave for months, you knew that so why are you trying to make me feel bad"?
"I'm getting a job, I need this for me, I'm tired of just being a housewife, and nothing else"
"Your a wife, and a Mother"
"Yes Mother, but really Ennis a wife, you haven't touched me in months, so really am I your wife or your maid". Alma threw the towel at him, "Finish drying the dishes, I'm going to bed alone". She stormed down the hall Ennis held the counter, he knew she was right, but he couldn't help it, this marriage was a cover up to a lie he has been living his whole life. He loved Jack, but hated him at the moment, because of him he finally had to face who he was, and he hated it.
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Post by melindajo2000 on Oct 13, 2011 15:50:21 GMT -6
this was so awesome.. you had Ennis ic. I like that you are doing a continuing story this should be fun to read, you could go a million ways with this. very original. Please update soon. Sanda reallty should try, she can get into character very well too
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Post by Sanda on Oct 13, 2011 15:53:04 GMT -6
Great start to your new story Jessie. I LOVED the movie Brokeback Mountain. Poor Alma and Ennis in this story. I fell so bad for Ennis having to hide is love for Jack behind his sham of a marriage to Alma becuase he is gay.
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Post by jessie on Oct 13, 2011 15:59:12 GMT -6
Thanks Melinda and Sanda glad you like this. I loved writing it, I loved the movie, and I'm a big fan of Heath Ledger, he protrayed Ennis to perfection, but Jake was wonderful as Jack. I felt horrible for Alma but in those days they did have to hide the truth. I wonder how Jack really died, in my story I will write it how I thought it really happened. Thanks again for reading my story.
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Post by jessie on Oct 15, 2011 1:26:28 GMT -6
Chapter 2
Ennis finished up the dishes, than went to the girls rooms. They were finished up with their homework. He told them it was lights out, they had to get sleep it was late. They hugged their Dad, and he whispered, "Love you both"
"Love you too Daddy". Ennis walked out leaning against their door. He knew his life was all a lie, but his two girls were his pride, and joy. He loved Alma but he knew where his heart truly was it was with Jack, and he hated himself for hurting Alma, and Jack because he was to scared, to face who he truly was . He walked over to his bedroom, and opened the door. Alma was reading a book, she grabbed the blanket, and pulled it up.
"What do you want Ennis"?
"I'm sorry if I upset you, maybe your right the girls should help you around here"
"Yeah they will have to I'm getting a job"
"No I don't want you working, I'm the bread winner"
"You don't bring enough home Ennis we both need to work. I can barely pay the bills, feed us, and cloth us. I haven't bought myself a deceit dress in almost a year"
"You make your clothes, they are beautiful"
"They are plain, everyone looks at me like I'm a sad pathetic wife"
"They do not"
"How would you know Ennis your head is in the clouds half the time. You only love 3 things those girls, your horses, and going to the mountain, why would anyone love being away from family for 3 months, and enjoy it"?
"It is the money, and I love my work, and I get to clear my head"
"You get away from me"
"I love you Alma, I don't get you why start this up now? I'm leaving in two days, I didn't need to worry about you the whole time"
"Than don't go"
"I get 3 thousand Dollars, that helps us out, I have to go"
"See you would never do anything for me"
"I'm going to sleep on the couch, I can't deal with this right now"
"Yeah Ennis you never can"
"What is it do you want me to make love to you? I will if that is what you want"?
"No like I would want it now, and when you make love to me it is like a duty, I want to feel loved"
Ennis grabbed a blanket, "Talk to you later, I'm really tired". He walked out Alma threw the book at the door, she was crying. Ennis stood outside the door, he wanted to go to her, but he knew he couldn't comfort her the way a Husband should. He walked out to the living room , he was looking out the window. He whispered, "Why did you come into my life Jack Twist"? He shut his eyes, and remembered the first time he saw him. He was standing outside his truck, going in to see if Joe had a job for him too. Ennis didn't want to admit it but seeing Jack that day got him so flustered his heart was racing. He was so great at hiding the truth from people, but Jack brought out stuff in him that he never thought would come out. He shut his eyes, and thought 2 more days Jack, 2 more days.
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Post by Sanda on Oct 15, 2011 8:49:10 GMT -6
Great update Jessie. Poor Alma and Poor Ennis. I feel horrible for both of them in this story. It must be awful and painful having to hide your sexual orientation from people behind a sham of a marriage. I felt horrible for Reid on As The World Turns when he was forced to choose between Luke and his job because of his sexual orientation.
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Post by melindajo2000 on Oct 15, 2011 12:16:33 GMT -6
great update I love this. I feel bad for Alma she might suspect something . that would be a difficult postion to be in but I feel bad for Jack to having to live a lie. Cant wait to see how you write Jack and Ennis's relationship
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Post by jessie on Oct 17, 2011 15:15:30 GMT -6
Chapter 3
The next 2 days went by slow Alma wouldn't even talk to Ennis. He didn't blame her, she was angry, and rightfully so. His heart wasn't with her it was with Jack, and he ached to see him again. He thought of him 24 hours a day, but he couldn't tell anyone, he was even afraid to write Jack. He got the occasional postcard from him, which was the highlight of his day. Alma would stare at him, and it made him feel horrible, it made him feel dirty. He brought out his suitcase, and his bag.
Jenny, and Alma Jr, ran over hugging him, "Daddy don't go"
"I have to I will be back before you know it, but you promise to be good for your Ma, Ma"
"I will promise' He smiled as he kissed their foreheads, they ran out to the porch so they could wave goodbye to him. Ennis walked over to Alma, "I will be home soon, I will miss you"
"Yeah sure you will , have a lovely time"
"I will miss you, and the girls, I have money in the drawer if you need it. The horses are being taken care of, just take care of yourself, and the girls"
"I do that already Ennis"
"I know you are a wonderful Wife, and Mother"
"Really wife, goodbye Ennis you should get going". Ennis went to kiss her but she turned away, he grabbed his bags, and went outside. He hugged the girls again, as he ran to his car, throwing the bags in, and got in, and drove off. He saw the girls waving from the porch, he had tears in his eyes, he wished he hadn't hurt Alma so bad, but he couldn't help himself. He was driving, he was sad for his girls, but excited about seeing Jack again. He was getting closer, and he was all warm inside, he needed Jack's arms around him, and he wanted to kiss him so bad. He saw Jack's truck, he was sitting on it. He was so sexy, and he waved as Ennis drove up.
Ennis sat just looking at Jack than finally opened the door of his truck. Jack was smiling, he was so excited that Ennis was finally here. Ennis laughed as he ran over to Jack, and pulled him close as they kissed. Jack slide right off the truck, right into Ennis's arms. They both fell to the ground, Jack grabbed Ennis's face, "You missed me, I see"
"Yes". They were kissing but Jack, sat up , "Lets get the tent ready, we can't do this out in the open". Ennis couldn't wait, he looked around, "No one is here"
"Ennis you always say we have to be private"
Jack smiled, "Fine in my truck". They jump in pulling the clothes off, as Jack , and Ennis become one very quickly. Jack yells out, "Slow down Ennis, not so rough". Ennis laughed, "I waited 5 months, this isn't rough". They both laugh as they made love like it was the last time. Jack was exhausted as Ennis sat beside him smiling, "Now this was wild you just couldn't wait Jack"
"Me Ennis you came on to me like a bear in heat, that was wild, but hot"
Ennis whispered, "Well we should get the tent ready, but I'm game if you are"
"Ennis what has gotten into you"?
"I love you Jack, I have needed you for so long". They kiss, as Ennis pushed Jack down, as he brought his body over him. Jack wasn't sure what was going on, but he liked it.
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Post by Sanda on Oct 17, 2011 15:43:11 GMT -6
Great update jessie. I feel horrible for Alma and the girls. Jack and tennis are so and adorable together in this chapter.
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Post by melindajo2000 on Oct 19, 2011 8:58:09 GMT -6
this was so good, I love this story already. I am glad to see Jack and Ennis reunited This is one of my favorite movies and you are def doing it justice!~
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Post by jessie on Oct 19, 2011 14:07:38 GMT -6
Thanks for your lovely comments, I loved this movie, I wanted to try a story with Ennis and Jack. Thanks I only hope I'm doing them justice. Chapter 4 Ennis and Jack grabbed their bags, and were walking to their campsite with the horses, Ennis was walking ahead of Jack. He was watching him, he had this sexy walk that drove Jack crazy. Jack stood watching as Ennis turned, "Are you coming what is wrong"? "The view from behind here is perfect" "What the mountains"? "No that cute butt of yours, I love that sexy walk". Ennis laughed, "Stop staring at my butt, we have to get our tents up before dark". Jack smiled as they continued to walk Ennis kept turning around, "Hurry up we are almost there". Ennis was running, Jack was following him. They found the spot, and dropped the bags, Ennis walked over to Jack, and wrapped his arms around him. "Ennis you are acting different did something happen"? "Not really I'm just happy can't you tell". Ennis smiled as he was dancing, Jack laughed there was no music, but he didn't care. He ran over going into Ennis arms, as they kissed again. Ennis whispered, "I have dreamed of this moment for months, I hate that I'm hurting Alma but I can't help it" "Alma is she ok"? "No she hates me, I can't be the husband she needs. I only want to make love to you, I hate that I'm a fake". Ennis started to cry, Jack was shocked, he went to touch him. Ennis walked away, "Wait I need to be alone". He walked away Jack stared he wanted to run to Ennis but he knew he needed to be alone. Jack grabbed the tent, and was putting it up. He was thinking about Ennis he has felt the sameway, but he didn't have to worry about his wife, she was happy he didn't touch her. Jack knew Ennis loved Alma, but to hear he didn't love her the way he loved him, made him feel so good, but he couldn't imagine what Alma was feeling. He was jealous of her she got him most of the year, he only got him a few weeks out of the year it wasn't fair. Jack suddenly got angry, and threw the tent down falling to the ground crying. Ennis turned seeing Jack throwing stuff, he ran back over. "Jack what is the matter"? "Why do we have to live this lie, I need you Ennis I die everything we are apart" "We can't you know why the world wouldn't accept us" "I don't care about the World, I only care about you". "Stop this Jack, we have our time together, this is all we got" "I want more, I demand more, this isn't enough" "It isn't for me either, I die seeing you drive away, but I'm not going to hurt my girls" "Think about yourself Ennis, lets go somewhere where we can be ourselves, please do this for me" Ennis yelled, "Jack stop". He turned running as Jack screamed out his name chasing him.
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Post by melindajo2000 on Oct 19, 2011 15:09:29 GMT -6
man it is hard but I dont know if Ennis would ever leave his girls. I hope Jack can accept him the way he is. Glad you updated, this is another favorite
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Post by Sanda on Oct 19, 2011 20:25:57 GMT -6
Great update Jessie. I feel bad for both Ennis and Jack in this story. I agree with MelindaJo, that I don't think Ennis would ever be able to leave his girls. I hope that Jack will be able to accept whatever decision Ennis makes. Jessie you are definitely doing Ennis and Jack justice in this awesome story of yours.
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Post by jessie on Oct 20, 2011 22:24:11 GMT -6
Chapter 5
Ennis stopped at the top of the hill, Jack walked over touching his back.
"Jack please I need to be alone"
"Really I thought you said you missed me was that a lie"?
"No, I missed you so much it hurt"
"Ennis please don't push me away, I want to help you"
"You want to run away, but I have responsibilities to my two sweet girls, and Alma"
"She deserves a man that loves her, she is just the Mother of your children, you were blessed with two beautiful girls"
"Yes I was they are my life, they come first Jack always"
"I understand that, but what about us"?
"This is us up on this mountain where we are alone, and we can make each other feel loved , even if it is only for a couple months out of the year"
"That might be enough for you, but I can't keep doing this"
"What are you saying, you want to move on"?
"No I want you Ennis, but this mountain isn't enough anymore"
"Well it is all I can offer, I guess it is over than"
"You want it to be over Ennis"?
"This is your choice, I will get the tent ready, I will sleep by the fire until tomorrow, I will go out first to take care of the sheep, you stay at camp". Ennis walked away, Jack felt tears come to his eyes.
"You bloody coward, your Father really did a number on you".
Ennis turned, "You are right, we are freaks, to most of the world, so yeah I'm a coward to go home, and say I'm in love with you"
"Your in love with me"?
"God you are dumb Jack, forget it". Ennis walked away, Jack walked away, he needed to get away for a few moments or he would say something he would regret forever. Ennis walked to the camp putting the tent up, he wiped tears from his eyes. He looked over seeing Jack walking away. He wanted to run to him, and say he would run away with him, but he knew he couldn't do it. He wouldn't do it to his girls, and he knew Jack was right he was scared to death, to let people know he was gay. His Father did do a number on him , he knew what happens when you come out, and he wouldn't do that to his girls, they would be ashamed of him, and that killed him. He finished the tent, and started the fire. He sat after looking at the fire burning, he shut his eyes. He whispered, "Oh Jack, I'm so sorry'
Ennis jumped when Jack walked over, "Sorry for what"?
"I was just talking to myself". Jack walked over sitting beside Ennis, "I was wrong expecting you to leave your family Ennis"
"No you have every right to demand more, but you are right I'm a coward"
Jack smiled, "No you are not a coward, but you are stubborn". Ennis smiled, "Yeah I guess I'm that but Bud you are too"
"Yeah I walked about a 1/2 mile, and all I thought about was you Ennis. I hate leaving you every trip, but having you a few months out of the year is enough for me, if you feel the same way". Ennis touched Jack's face, "I hate hurting you, and Alma, but I'm doing what I feel is right for my girls"
"I wish I was half the Father you are, Ennis you are wonderful". Jack went into his arms, they just laid holding each other for the longest time.
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Post by melindajo2000 on Oct 21, 2011 10:01:21 GMT -6
I am glad they bonded, I hope they can find a way to stay together. Love this story!
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